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Thursday, March 26, 2020

Teeth -- By Georgie

I watched a video called Teeth. I then wrote a random ending for the story. I hope you enjoy it! I really enjoyed making this. But I couldn't really find sentences or words that would make a bit more funny, and not just have the whole thing serious. Have you ever gone fishing? Have you ever laughed at someones misfortune?
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5 comments:

  1. Dave SutherlandMarch 27, 2020 at 12:14 PM

    Hahhaha! Great ending! I like how you built up to the ending by using show don't tell. I stood on a fishing hook before and trust me, I didn't laugh much but my brother did.

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  2. AnonymousMarch 27, 2020 at 12:24 PM

    Ow that would hurt.

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  3. AnonymousApril 6, 2020 at 11:21 AM

    Hi Georgie, what a great piece of writing. I would love to know what happended if you wrote the full story. You are using the think 6 model really well.

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  4. AnonymousApril 15, 2020 at 10:25 AM

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  5. AnonymousApril 15, 2020 at 10:29 AM

    Good story but you wrote though instead of thought that was the only mistake the rest was fine though. I have never been fishing but I probably will soon. Good job

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